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    Re: As a sports writer, I'm still very much a work in progress...

    Quote Originally Posted by Matt700wlw View Post
    This is only the second article I've ever written, but I thought I'd share

    http://mlbreports.com/2013/01/04/redsstate/



    This is my first one...

    http://mlbreports.com/2012/12/09/nastyboys/


    Constructive criticism is welcomed! Please be nice, I'm not getting paid for this
    Loved it! Just bookmarked the blog. Great lede (anything about the Reds that starts with "97 wins" wins my approval), nice flow, concisely summed up the entire team.

    I'm a writer by trade too. Since you said you're looking for constructive criticism, the only thing I can think to offer for now is don't feel the need to use a lot of commas. Sentences will read a little easier if you're not setting off a bunch of items. I like Purdue's online writing lab a lot--here's what they have to say about it: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/607/02/

    Can't wait to read more from you!
    "I never argue with people who say baseball is boring, because baseball is boring. And then, suddenly, it isn't. And that's what makes it great." - Joe Posnanski

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    Re: As a sports writer, I'm still very much a work in progress...

    Thanks guys!!

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    Good work! One question -- you write that Brandon Phillips' signing was "the best thing to happen this off-season." What about Votto's extension?
    "Iíll kind of have a foot on the back of my own butt. Thatís just how I do things.Ē -- Bryan Price, 10/22/2013

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    Re: As a sports writer, I'm still very much a work in progress...

    Nice job, Matt! Great reads!
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